"Wear your overcoat," you teased and so I did,
the salty one stitched with seabreeze and constellations
and an inner pocket for lip balm. Driving up I glimpsed you
dancing on the sand then clambering onto impossible crags
where it seemed the lighthouse beacon would never reach,
but it did and I smiled despite the clutching in my stomach.
I hadn't imagined it being awkward like a first date
where the cologne wafts past and the instant of kissability
falls into my lap where the napkin and tablecloth edge linger,
and yet here it was, the crossing of the Pacific and me, well both
of us shy as kittens and playfulness glinting in the corners of our
eyes. I hadn't imagined it being dangerous like the inevitability
of parting amicably or otherwise, and yet it was just that,
inevitable as the salt you had and would stitch into my overcoat,
the taste of your breathless kiss almost stinging as it sang deep
deep into my lungs, into my stomach with the knot clutching tighter.
It could have been your steady gaze or beckoning abandon that
did me in, but it was your sighs full of life and death, hunger and
disenchantment, elation and misery and us, yes us, that thrust me
into the sky for that fateful moment when the lesson of Icarus met
the stillness of gloaming and everything became possible again
and tragic only described a parched throat of longing. Afterward you
grinned a mirth from the city of my childhood, briefly silent and secretive,
the rush of wind and blood filling my ears like twilight in cahoots
with the jaded hopeless romantic, and I was lost with you
coaxed from warm cobblestones and skylines to this spinning passage
of fearless grace as the roar of Point Reyes receded from my eyes
and I climbed down from the deck. So I relived learning to julienne
with the afternoon flaking through lidded drapes onto uneasy scratches
of wooden cutlery, waving goodbye as I clasped you to my soul
in that awkward embarassment with which all learning and loving begins.














Comments
Hiding away only to surprise with poems here and there... Your writing is better than anyone else's on here - This much is obvious.
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Death grows...
Your words never cease to amaze me. I feel lucky when my mind is ample enough to understand what you have to tell the world.
What I love most about this is the way you captured the innocennce of the first steps at love. Everything is always so fresh, so uplifting, so possible.
It's a very nice feeling.
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Those in stone houses should not throw glass.
"Never sever what can be untied."
There is a gradual progression in style from prose, conversational to more and more esoterica. I enjoy the parallelism to the subject matter in this respect--the beginning seems simple enough, easy to follow, with the general trepidation. As you move through the piece, things become a little more cloudy, as the relationship begins to thicken so does your imagery and internal reference.
There is a danger here, that the reader may lose out on your journey with self-referential encryption, (a reference to a 'julienne' for example) but I believe the power and execution to be strong enough to push past.
I very much enjoy your word collaboration--it invites the reader to consider as opposed to confuse.
Grace us more often, if you please.
I can honestly say that this has gone some length towards renewing my conviction that humanity actually has something worthwhile to say (a conviction that was pronounced dead a few days ago but actually has a weak pulse again now).
This is really, truly beautiful. Thank you for sharing it.
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Orion may cry, but never follow after
Far away where, wanderer by wanderer,
The moon lies down with the west water.
--Ted Hughes
Yes, it is certainly easy enough to draw that conclusion; the amount of drivel greatly outweighs the outstanding. I have found a handful of shining jewels that keep my faith here, and breathheld is certainly one of them.
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~Jan-leva.
"The bitterest tears shed over graves are for words left unsaid and deeds left undone."
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Simple words my dear,
it's all about simple, honest words...
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The best things in life, aren't really things.
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