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Tell me, lover, how the flooded sky peals the soul's vengeance,
the churning of autumn and echoing footfalls on the stairwell

with dusk tasting like our kisses in their eager, sanguine
(bittersweet) youth.

Fearful of depths, I fled your embrace to fall swooning,
each glance a brush of laden finishing, a heart-heresy.

Yesterday I sealed the last box, wiping my brow and wearing
those sage, harried conversations

as only a crushed kite with torn webbing can muster
in the face of distance.

Now, when I smile at you, there are only waves ebbing
across sandbars and our twilights.
©2006-2009 ~breathheld
:iconbreathheld:

Author's Comments

People grow.

Daily Deviation

Given 2006-10-26

Density by ~breathheld is a very simple poem upon the first reading. Read it again, and you'll find that it takes you through the upper joys and lower depths on the human heart. (Suggested by =kaujot and Featured by `imperfect)

Comments


:iconbklah:
Indeed they do. This reminds me of
e. e. cummings but with the depth and sad diction of Emily dickenson.

I really like the way metaphors are so forcefully smoothed in that when we think the poem through only the meanings of the words jump out.

--
~One day, the great mosquito will come~
~Kudos for waffles~
~ I have C.C.D~
:icontatsel:
It is so nice to read your work again...

--
Death grows...
:icontweekfreak:
Aww, this is beautiful. You have a great way with words.
:icontigre-piccola:
made my heartache. incredibly beautiful.

--
it's all about the jazz, baby
:iconarliddian:
Beautiful piece. Congratulations on the DD.

--
[Philippians 1:21]
:iconmercury-yume:
oh. Yes. You're right. Wow.

--
"The goblins have forty-two different words for 'ow'" - Detonate
:iconfionn:
Enjoyed this a lot. Very impressed.

--
'What happens is a continual surrender of himself as he is at the moment to something which is more valuable. The progress of an artist is a continual self-sacrifice, a continual extinction of personality.' - TS Eliot, 'Tradition and Individual Talent'
:iconlovehatecantdecide:
Wow. Amazing wording. I admit I had to read it through a few times to understand it a little, but I enjoyed the image it gave me in my head. :heart:

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"Today, I went to take off her bra, and when I finally unhooked it from behind her, it snapped back and hit me in the eye. FML"

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